Discussion: PREY
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Discussion: PREY
Here is the discussion for my multi-part story, PREY. Please give positive and constructive criticism, other feedback, and tell me what you'd like to see in the story.
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Thank you!
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I know. It's a dark story.
Did I mention the subtitle?
Did I mention the subtitle?
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Thanks.
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Part 2 is up.
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Not bad. If a little more emphasis was put on the emotional parts, the resonance of the story would go through the roof!
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So, what would you recommend I do? PM me, please.
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Forgot to post here a while back.
Anyway, as I said in the PM, not bad and this is quite a suspenseful story that leaves you wondering what could be out there in the darkness. I am also surprised to see this be quite a dark story which I very much welcome. Keep up the good work and I wish to see more of this.
Anyway, as I said in the PM, not bad and this is quite a suspenseful story that leaves you wondering what could be out there in the darkness. I am also surprised to see this be quite a dark story which I very much welcome. Keep up the good work and I wish to see more of this.
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Thanks a dozen, GvJ.
Part 2 is in the process of being edited for some more additional stuff.
Part 3 is also in the works in my head, to be written out soon enough.
Part 2 is in the process of being edited for some more additional stuff.
Part 3 is also in the works in my head, to be written out soon enough.
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Well hurry it up, I'm tired of waiting!M.U.T.O. wrote:Thanks a dozen, GvJ.
Part 2 is in the process of being edited for some more additional stuff.
Part 3 is also in the works in my head, to be written out soon enough.
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Re: Discussion: PREY
Well, somehow I overlooked this story before and I'm sad that did not read it sooner!
The story was laid out pretty well, I liked the dark tone this story is going with and the use of first person narrative. Honestly I'm not a big fan of first person, however, your story actually does nice job of keep the reader hooked. I loved the insights to the family as definitely tried to establish some character drama and for most part worked. Although probably could spend a little bit more on them, but sometimes is hard to do with first person.
Overall, this great story! I like how it is basically in mystery to what exactly the creature is and really do not see many monsters stories with the villain being a worm like creature. Keep it up!
The story was laid out pretty well, I liked the dark tone this story is going with and the use of first person narrative. Honestly I'm not a big fan of first person, however, your story actually does nice job of keep the reader hooked. I loved the insights to the family as definitely tried to establish some character drama and for most part worked. Although probably could spend a little bit more on them, but sometimes is hard to do with first person.
Overall, this great story! I like how it is basically in mystery to what exactly the creature is and really do not see many monsters stories with the villain being a worm like creature. Keep it up!
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Thanks a dozen! This story, though currently in a state of limbo, might resume with parts.
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Hey, that happens man. Heck, most of my stories have become on hiatus lately >_> lol
Best thing to do is don't rush any aspect of the story, take your time.
Best thing to do is don't rush any aspect of the story, take your time.
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Hey all! This'll be revived in due time, probably re-created with new kaiju and an altered plot. The name will be kept, but a new thread'll be created for the story.
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