Ernesth's One Shots! Disscussion

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Ernesth's One Shots! Disscussion

Postby ernesth100 » Tue Feb 18, 2014 7:39 pm

Well I think its about time I announced this. I've been working on ALOT Of stories during my absence that I'm almost done with. I will post them her in the following order:

-Dust: The Full Story
Info: My fan made continuation to this little story here: http://www.newyorker.com/fiction/featur ... millhauser
-Pheonix vs. Dragon: Inferno Wars-
Info: A story about Dragons at war with Pheonix's. Here's something my version of the Pheonix is actually a dragon whom let the power of The Flame(the inner source of fire for all dragons) consume them becoming the beast ingulfed in flames known as a Pheonix.
-1980-Something Space Guy: Classified Story
Info: A story about Benny the Space Guy from the Lego Movie! But its much more dramatic and serious than the Lego Movie. Its about Bennys experience almost dying in space and trying to get back home to Earth.
-The Life of a Collector.

I may add more one shots but for now this is all.

Story: viewtopic.php?f=18&t=17685
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Calling It Now, GvKK, King Kong won't be an inch under 250 ft.

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Re: Ernesth's One Shots! Disscussion

Postby GodzillaFreak99 » Wed Feb 19, 2014 7:06 am

Ikay, how can I put this? your story is........lackluster. You need more detail, You need to flush out the situation more, you know? describe Blu and your other characters a bit more, Give more description of their surroundings, and flush out the situation

I'm terrible at giving advice, so bear with me. Not trying to be a jerk here.
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Re: Ernesth's One Shots! Disscussion

Postby ernesth100 » Wed Feb 19, 2014 3:47 pm

Blu is Benny from the Lego Move. I thought that would basically describe him for me.
Every fan fic I've made so far http://www.tohokingdom.com/forum/viewto ... 48#p624848
My Channel: https://www.youtube.com/channel/UCDz...9FTHC6A/videos
I want Kong v Godzilla To Be like BvS but...y'know, better critically received. With Mothra filling the role of Wonder Woman and Ghidorah filling the role of Doomsday. Here's to hoping. :D

Calling It Now, GvKK, King Kong won't be an inch under 250 ft.

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Re: Ernesth's One Shots! Disscussion

Postby GodzillaLord » Wed Feb 19, 2014 5:33 pm

ernesth100 wrote:Blu is Benny from the Lego Move. I thought that would basically describe him for me.


"FACEPALM" their are plenty of Characters named BLU!!!! and even then you didn't describe who the hell he was!!!!!1
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No. Given that the majority of Godzilla kaiju aren't sentient and are essentially just large animals, that's a little bit messed up. "Shrug", i digress do what you like, but i don't need the information.

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Postby ernesth100 » Wed Feb 19, 2014 5:38 pm

Well hopefully you'll like Dust better. Its the next story.
Every fan fic I've made so far http://www.tohokingdom.com/forum/viewto ... 48#p624848
My Channel: https://www.youtube.com/channel/UCDz...9FTHC6A/videos
I want Kong v Godzilla To Be like BvS but...y'know, better critically received. With Mothra filling the role of Wonder Woman and Ghidorah filling the role of Doomsday. Here's to hoping. :D

Calling It Now, GvKK, King Kong won't be an inch under 250 ft.

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Re: Ernesth's One Shots! Disscussion

Postby ernesth100 » Fri Feb 21, 2014 12:59 pm

And thats exactly why it's a one-shot. Other than that thanks for the honesty. Just got one more story to post then it's done(feel free to thank god).
Every fan fic I've made so far http://www.tohokingdom.com/forum/viewto ... 48#p624848
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I want Kong v Godzilla To Be like BvS but...y'know, better critically received. With Mothra filling the role of Wonder Woman and Ghidorah filling the role of Doomsday. Here's to hoping. :D

Calling It Now, GvKK, King Kong won't be an inch under 250 ft.

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Postby ernesth100 » Fri Mar 14, 2014 4:08 pm

So hey I entered another one shot. It's from a series I did a long time ago but never got to finish.
Every fan fic I've made so far http://www.tohokingdom.com/forum/viewto ... 48#p624848
My Channel: https://www.youtube.com/channel/UCDz...9FTHC6A/videos
I want Kong v Godzilla To Be like BvS but...y'know, better critically received. With Mothra filling the role of Wonder Woman and Ghidorah filling the role of Doomsday. Here's to hoping. :D

Calling It Now, GvKK, King Kong won't be an inch under 250 ft.

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Postby GodzillaFreak99 » Fri Mar 14, 2014 5:50 pm

Still needs work points for having Naruto and Iron-man in there though. but yeah, keep working on it.
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Re: Ernesth's One Shots! Disscussion

Postby ernesth100 » Sat Mar 15, 2014 4:46 pm

How does this short story sound. This one I only put in points of how the story unfolds on a basic level. In other words its more of a cronologically(did i spell that right) ordered list than a story.

http://www.newyorker.com/fiction/featur ... millhauser

-Dust accumalates to ankle height.
-Soon a blizzard ensues in the middle of summer a blizzard of dust.
-People evacuate, eventually being forced to evacuate after state is quarentined and a large portion of the state.
-A week later a hurricane insues lasting 38 hours. scattering the dust across the country and endangering other areas.
-it is soon discovered that complete darkness limits multiplying dust and eventually kills it.The world puts its resources into making giant metal domes to cover areas and destroy dust.
-It works as any left over dust is sucked up and burned.
-However somewhere some high on a mountain range bathed in light. The dust multiplies unexpectedly. End.
Every fan fic I've made so far http://www.tohokingdom.com/forum/viewto ... 48#p624848
My Channel: https://www.youtube.com/channel/UCDz...9FTHC6A/videos
I want Kong v Godzilla To Be like BvS but...y'know, better critically received. With Mothra filling the role of Wonder Woman and Ghidorah filling the role of Doomsday. Here's to hoping. :D

Calling It Now, GvKK, King Kong won't be an inch under 250 ft.

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Postby ernesth100 » Mon Nov 10, 2014 6:49 am

New One Shot. My first attempt at an emotional/documentary type story.

The Life of A Collector.
Sypnosis: Young David Ludo begins the life cycle of a collector.

Enjoy, and please voice your opinions here.
Every fan fic I've made so far http://www.tohokingdom.com/forum/viewto ... 48#p624848
My Channel: https://www.youtube.com/channel/UCDz...9FTHC6A/videos
I want Kong v Godzilla To Be like BvS but...y'know, better critically received. With Mothra filling the role of Wonder Woman and Ghidorah filling the role of Doomsday. Here's to hoping. :D

Calling It Now, GvKK, King Kong won't be an inch under 250 ft.

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Postby ernesth100 » Wed Feb 18, 2015 10:54 pm

New One Shot, I don't wanna spoil to much. But think, Anti-Smoking Campaign meets Walking Dead in a Rated R story. Right Here: viewtopic.php?f=18&t=17685&p=1208163#p1208163
Every fan fic I've made so far http://www.tohokingdom.com/forum/viewto ... 48#p624848
My Channel: https://www.youtube.com/channel/UCDz...9FTHC6A/videos
I want Kong v Godzilla To Be like BvS but...y'know, better critically received. With Mothra filling the role of Wonder Woman and Ghidorah filling the role of Doomsday. Here's to hoping. :D

Calling It Now, GvKK, King Kong won't be an inch under 250 ft.

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Re: Ernesth's One Shots! Disscussion

Postby ernesth100 » Wed Jun 24, 2015 12:17 pm

I have made a reboot of Smokers Apocolypse. I have four more stories planned for the series. One focusing on each character, including Timmy again. And finally a story where they reunite to take on a massive evil together.
Every fan fic I've made so far http://www.tohokingdom.com/forum/viewto ... 48#p624848
My Channel: https://www.youtube.com/channel/UCDz...9FTHC6A/videos
I want Kong v Godzilla To Be like BvS but...y'know, better critically received. With Mothra filling the role of Wonder Woman and Ghidorah filling the role of Doomsday. Here's to hoping. :D

Calling It Now, GvKK, King Kong won't be an inch under 250 ft.


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